What is your opinion of the following as the first draft of a reflection on writing?
Over the four years I have been in high school, my writing has never ceased to improve. I have had four different teachers over four years, who have all changed my writing in different ways. Each year, I altered my writing process slightly to better suit my needs. An example of a change in my writing process is how I came up with my own unique prewriting method. Every class that I have attended always featured discussion along with explication of the current text, which I found helpful. These discussions, along with analytical works, have cultivated my ability to analyze text thoroughly and effectively. While I still make errors, markedly with the same tense throughout a paper, the quality of my writing has improved to a point I never thought I would achieve.
My writing process usually entails attempting to silence everything around me in order to concentrate and formulate thoughts. I have to subverse myself within the work to attain my desired thoughts and pay attention to every detail the writer is trying to convey in their work.
What are some strengths of this piece?
What are some problems?
Over the four years I have been in high school, my writing has never ceased to improve. I have had four different teachers over four years, who have all changed my writing in different ways. Each year, I altered my writing process slightly to better suit my needs. An example of a change in my writing process is how I came up with my own unique prewriting method. Every class that I have attended always featured discussion along with explication of the current text, which I found helpful. These discussions, along with analytical works, have cultivated my ability to analyze text thoroughly and effectively. While I still make errors, markedly with the same tense throughout a paper, the quality of my writing has improved to a point I never thought I would achieve.
My writing process usually entails attempting to silence everything around me in order to concentrate and formulate thoughts. I have to subverse myself within the work to attain my desired thoughts and pay attention to every detail the writer is trying to convey in their work.
What are some strengths of this piece?
- Good ideas such as the role of teachers, class discussions and prewriting in helping to improve writing.
- Good verbs such as attended, convey and formulated.
- Nice sentence ending “….thoroughly and effectively.”
What are some problems?
- Words which can be cut (eg. that) or replaced for the sake of clarity (eg. markedly).
- Sentences which can be combined to make each carry more meaning, avoid repetition and create sentence variety (eg. the last two sentences of the second paragraph).
- The word writing which occurs in each of the first four lines.
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